pool of thought }{ HOF deff

[Etell E. Gence]

enter da soul of da poets mystical minds/
pages burn while you fliping throught time/
spit in rewind/
niggas aint da ones dat be holding da block/
but fate da devil watch as hope get shot/
....down/
throught da town/
where da hounds/
hold da crown/
like pitchers watch bats that mold da mound/ (wow)
deep like a drop of ground/
niggas die when da time be bitch/
hustlers abandoned da shit/
gotta give my mouths shots cause my rhymes be sick/
understand when ya find da clip/
money frozen like pics/
CLICK!

[Dennen]

flow was hot an had some nice lines

shit was jus a lil short tho

i think you need to expand line length an sort out structure

an maybe add a few lines to make a complete verse

overall was pretty hot tho

[Etell E. Gence]

Wow i had waaaayyy more line than dat but it probally got deleted or sumin DAMN!! dat was sum of my best shit

[Dennen]

nobody has edited your post

[Vallus]

solid....work on upping complexity and vocabulary
had some decent parts.....stay up

[Etell E. Gence]

admin said:

nobody has edited your post

well i dont know what happened

[Catastrophe]

ehh it was alright man..some nice lines in there...def need more complexity and wut not to get into HOF im still surprised i got my piece in there : )