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Post by dangerousmind on Jan 11, 2006 6:19:58 GMT
MY RYHEMS CUT U UP LIKE THE MAN FROM CRYSTAL LAKE,AROUNDS DUVAL I MAKE THE DEATH RISE LIKE INSURANCE RATES.[MAN IM SICK], IM COOLBLOODED LIKE THE NIGGA NAME RICK, TALK TRASH U IN UP IN THE BFI TRUCK' GET UA CHAIN TUCK IN DUVAL LIKE BUCK' GIRLS LIKE IT THEY SAY IM THE BEST THEY EVER HAD' I WEAR BLACK LIKE MICHEAL IN BAD'INFACT U LIKE MICHEAL A FAG' IF U DONT LIKE WHAT I SPITT TELL UR BOYFRIEND WHILE U SUCKIN HIS DICK U PRICK'HOES WANT TO LOVE ME' NIGGAS WANT TO KILL ME' I BET U ASK UR GIRL SHE FEELIN ME
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Post by dangerousmind on Jan 11, 2006 6:20:57 GMT
IF U DONT LIKE WHAT I SAY THE FLY AWAY
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Post by Dennen on Jan 11, 2006 7:23:14 GMT
4/10
shit was jus all talk an no rhymes
im sure you could spit better than that whoever you are that was jus plain awfull
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Post by Vallus on Jan 11, 2006 16:06:53 GMT
it was somewhat decent in the beginning
read some other drops and make a song typa structure without all the capitalization
not pressing enter at the end of bars and turning it into a paragraph makes it
hard as hell to read and hard as hell to catch the flow
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Perplex
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Post by Perplex on Jan 11, 2006 19:14:50 GMT
Yea Fam I Told Him About His Structure
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Catastrophe
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Post by Catastrophe on Jan 12, 2006 0:36:54 GMT
ehh...too simple..really basic..try and go more complex on this shit...fix up structure i kno i aint one to talk bout it but yea..lol...anyways keep the ink spillin....
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Post by Double~Hitz on Jan 12, 2006 15:46:11 GMT
Wats Wit Tha hate Dennen LOL  j/k but yeah The First Couple Of Lines was Nice then just Fell Apart look At others Strucure And Work On Ya Rhymes |
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